Starts off ambient, then goes all over the place.
The biggest thing I noticed was the lack of structure in this song. It's there, but you just need to develop it a bit more.
The kick needs to be the loudest element of your song and needs to have the most bass out of anything. Try looking into mastering. There are a bunch of tutorials on youtube, I'm sure you'll find something.
More on the kick, it helps to layer kick samples together. A typical guideline for layering kicks is to have 3 layered together, one for the sub bass, one with a lot of mid frequencies, and the other being a punchy, higher frequency sound.
You have a knack for guitar, it sounds really good here, but doesn't fit quite well with the tone of the track. The guitar you use here is a really powerful instrument that needs to be the center of the melody in this track. Try adjusting the mood of the track towards the guitar so it doesn't sound so unusual when it comes in.
The synth in the beginning is very high pitched. You should route that through a channel in the mixer and play around with the chorus and flanger effects.
There's a lot of potential in this track, it just needs more structure.
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